Okay Shepard and anyone else. I am sure I will be posting more weird questions as i write this book through the month. So Basic info:
Chapter 1
The large cat ran through the young forest,
her body stretching long and lean as she let her muscles work. She leapt over
the volcanic rocks with ease and twisted through the small trees as if they
were hardly even there. Every breath was a new burst of energy, of passion, as
she drunk in the twilight.
The sounds of the coming night were a
comforting song and helped to relax her even more, every flutter of wing and
cricket chirp was a reminder that the world was always a growing and thriving
place. Her tawny coat seemed to gleam from an inner glow as her ears twitched
to absorb the hoot of the owl and the slide of the leaves through the air.
The sensitive pads of her feet hit the
mossy forest floor with a silent shock through her golden legs. The cougar stopped
quietly and let the air move around her. She knew a herd of Elk was close and
would be about to bed down for the night. She had been tracking them for hours
by their scent and knew the herd was a large one.
Suddenly the sensitive dark ears heard the
sound she had been searching for. A quiet crack and rustle as the herd shifted
to rest. Slowly the cougar dropped her head and let the camouflaged pack draped
around her neck drop to the ground. Then the lean muscled body shifted and
turned, four legs turned to a pair of shapely pale legs and two well toned arms
and where the cougar had stood a woman remained.
Samantha Jackson took a deep breath to
steady her nerves. The calm of the run seemed to have fled along with the tawny
body. She had been changing shapes for over fifteen years of her twenty-eight
year life and still it left her feeling awkward at times and unsure of herself
even with the added strength and heightened senses. Not for the first time she
wished someone had been around to guide her through all of this stuff but fate
had dealt her a different hand.
She reached into the pack and pulled her
hunting clothes from their specially seal bag, grateful she was so careful to
scent lock all of her gear before she made a trek into the eastern Cascades outside
of Yakima, Washington.
Sam felt her confidence return and grow as
she pulled on the familiar clothes and tied her soft handmade elk-skin boots to
her feet. She chose everything she used to hunt with extreme care and attention
to detail and her clothes were just the start. The boots were soft as butter
and let her move just as silently in human form as she had as the cougar. The
soft light pants and long sleeved shirt were worn from years of use and
hand-me-down age but the camouflaged pattern was perfect for the fall changes
surrounding her and helped make the job of tracking the herd easier for her in
human form.
Next she pulled her rifle pieces from the
pack. The .308 gleamed in the dimming sunlight. Every inch of the dark
collapsible stock looked like it had been lovingly caressed. The black steel
bull barrel was a gorgeous 18 inches and she quickly assembled the gun to avoid
losing her shot.
She removed the scope caps and remembered that she
really needed to find a way to pay Jason back for it. Any scopes were hard to
find these days. Add that he had managed to find one of such good quality and
hardly even used and it made the gift all the more precious. Sam vowed to
herself to bring down her elk just to have some meat to share with her cranky
partner in crime solving.
She quietly slid her already loaded magazine in
place and placed a round in the chamber, careful to muffle the sound as best
she could. On nimble feet Samantha crept forward and let her senses take over.
She reveled in the feeling of freedom she felt as she stalked her prey.
She had spent countless weeks in the mountains and
the forest with her best friend Will through the hard years of their childhood.
Every time she felt suffocated by the curious or disapproving looks of the other
children at the orphanage or her skin felt prickly and tight from a buildup of
magic they would camp out for a while and let their feet take them all over.
They had discovered long forgotten lakes and cabins. They had stomped over
volcanic crags and ashen waste out of sheer curiosity. Neither had been old enough
to see the eruptions of Mt. Rainer and Mt. St. Helens in 2015 that had put all
past North American eruptions to shame but the evidence was there to be
examined and looked over. Of course both were smart enough to keep their
distance. The mountains still made their presence known by sending up smoke and
fire occasionally.
As the memories crossed her mind she felt the ground
tremble and cursed her luck. A sudden flurry of activity in front of her made
her stifle a curse and leap for a nearby rock. Sam shook her head as she
realized she had let daydreaming overtake her common sense and she had stumbled
almost over the herd.
In front of her a dozen large auburn elk moved and
shifted restlessly. The light was almost gone now and they were ready for sleep
but the rumble of the earth had made their adrenaline rush and tightened their
sense of fear. Sam knew the meat would be a bit gamey now because of the added
rush of hormones but knew she and Jason would benefit from the meat and winter
was not long off now.
She knelt on her chosen perch and waited with baited
breath. Patience was something she knew well. She let the moments fly by even
though the light was becoming even less with each breath. One of the perks of
being able to shift shapes was a lot of added body strength and her senses were
amazingly heightened, so much so that she had learned to ignore them when in
the company of other normal people.
Finally the sun fully set and the herd quieted
enough that she felt confident in taking her shot. She was close enough that
she didn’t even bother with the scope but instead looked through the gun’s
original sights beneath the raised scope mount. She found the large bull and
quickly guessed him to be easily 800 pounds. He was massive and so beautiful,
his hide thick with fall growth. She could already taste the meat. Sam sent a
silent thanks to the elk as her way of paying tribute to the life she was
taking and then with a light squeeze she pulled the trigger.
The bull dropped before the retort of her gun had
even finished its echo. The cows jumped to their feet and scattered in
confusion and fear. Even without being in her cougar form Sam could smell their
terror and hated that they had been caused such grief. Luckily there were many
grand bulls looking for mates for the fall rut and she took comfort in knowing
they would not be without a male for long.
Sam broke her gun down and used her keen eyesight to
quickly gather two thick long branches and pulled her knife from the pack on
her back. She shaved off all the knobs and smaller branches until she had two
long thick poles. Then she bound them together at their strongest ends with a
thick braided twine she had made last winter. Once that was done she found two
more heavy branches and repeated the cleaning and binding until she was left
with a large A-shaped frame with double cross pieces.
Pulling a thick treated hide from her pack Sam
secured it over the frame so that she was left with a sturdy travois to pull her
elk home on. Then she bent to the task of field dressing her bull. The dark was
no deterrent due to her keen eyesight and she let her mind wander to the case
she and Jason had just solved as her body fell into the very familiar rhythm of
skinning and cutting.
The National Investigative Service director, Levi
Walsh, had sent them to upper Manitoba where a United North America Army
training base was being plagued by a killer. Someone was taking young trainees
on night runs and brutally killing them. The weird part had been that all of
their blood was missing and these men and women were extremely strong and very
well trained. They should have been able to deal with any attacker easily.
Sam and Jason had become used to weird crap. Jason
had been with NIS since its birth eighteen years ago and Samantha had been
recruited five years ago for her photographic memory and quick mind. Her
strength and ability to outshoot most men was a huge bonus.
This case was weirder than any that they had seen.
The lack of blood coupled with the extreme brutality of the bodies was a conundrum
neither had been quick to understand. It had taken Sam secretly going off in
the form of a moose to discover that they were dealing with a 500 year old
vampire.
Paranormal stuff was slowly coming out as the years
had passed after the End Times and more and more humanity was learning that all
the scary things they had written and dreamed of had a basis in fact. This
vampire was desperate. She, which explained the predominantly male victims, was
nearing the end of her life and was desperate to avoid death and the fiery
damnation she thought awaited so she figured bumping off a bunch of prime Army
guys might be just the ticket. Their blood had to be the strongest right?
Once Sam had found the what and who it had taken
some ghostly help and some maneuvering to get Jason on the same track and then
it was hunting time. NIS rules were clear; under the new laws the community
leader decided the fate of the offender and death was deemed the sentence in
this case. So Sam and Jason had to figure out how to kill a vampire. Neither
had ever seen one let alone tried to kill one so it was an interesting couple
days of trial and error.
Garlic was useless. Crosses were laughable. Even
tracking the chick was difficult and Samantha was an expert their but the thing
could fly. Finally they had found it in a cave off of the major river about
five miles from the base and Sam had the impulsive idea to set it on fire. They
made some torches and cornered the vamp and in a bang and a puff the thing and
turned to dust. Sam still wasn’t sure if it was the wood or the fire hitting
the vamp that had done the trick but she was far to happy with the outcome to
complain.
Being an NIS agent was so different that being a cop
used to be. Not only did they solve crime but if the community they were tasked
with helping needed aid in the sentencing aspect they did that as well. Courts
with jury’s were a thing of the past. Now the community leaders made the
choices of guilt and innocence. They pretty much had too. It was either they
make the choices or no choices were made. There just wasn’t a big enough
population anywhere to support large scale law anymore.
Sam was jerked away from her thoughts about the case
and the way life was before her birth by a familiar voice at her shoulder. “Are
you done yet?”
“For hell’s sake, Will. What are you doing here?”
William Mark appeared beside her and swept his honey
colored hair out of his eyes. You would think he would have figured out how to
change his look but being dead hadn’t made cutting his hair easy. He was
permanently stuck at eighteen. His thick hair had been in his eyes the day he
had smacked into the tree on an impulsive skiing trip and so it remained.
“I’ve been here a while. I like watching you work.”
Sam laughed, “You’re just lucky you can’t be of any
physical help.”
He managed to look a bit embarrassed as he sat down
on a nearby rock. “I wish I could help. I kind of miss this part of things.”
Sam looked at the elk laid out beside her and the
neat packages she had made of meet and other useful bits. “Oh please. You
always hated the blood.”
“Well yeah but the stalking was pretty cool.”
She stifled an eye roll. “Okay then, glad we are
being honest. Ready to tell me why you’re really here?”
“I was worried about you.”
“Worried?” She knew the surprise was evident on her
face, even in the moonlight.
“This last case was a bit out there. I mean vampires
existing? Who knew?”
She felt a bit wistful, “I bet my family knew, I bet
they knew all about this magical paranormal junk.”
“Samantha we don’t know anything about them except
that they didn’t survive the asteroid hit and the volcanic explosions that
followed. Hell, you were lucky to be found.”
“I know Will.” Sam looked down at the bundles and
made sure she had removed everything she could from the elk that they could use
before she left it for the other meat eaters. “I just know I could do my job
better if I knew more about this stuff but I have no idea who to ask. It’s not
like being paranormal is accepted and liked. People all over are hiding their
truth because of the fear and the law allows for execution if the community
leaders deem someone a threat. I hide my own truth from pretty much everyone. I
get it. I just hate not understanding this stuff.”
He reached out a sympathetic hand and for a brief
moment she imagined she could feel the touch on her cheek. “Sam I know not
having the answers drives you nuts but you are good at your job and at finding
answers. You will figure all of this stuff out.”
“I hope so. I don’t need any more cases like that
last one to screw with my head.”
“Well I guess we can hope this next one is a bit
more normal?” Will asked, hopefully.
“Normal and
NIS cases are a bit of an oxymoron Will. I figure the most I can hope for is
less paranormal.”
Good start and an interesting universe to work with. Kinda of Larry Correia's Hard Magic meets MHI with a dose post apocalypse thrown in. Lots of options to work with.
ReplyDeleteNow, I'm no expert on hunting, but I think you've got too much noise and movement in your scene after she shapeshifts from cougar to human. Deer and Elk are skitish critters that key off those senses. Go read the early chapters of Stephen Hunter's "Shooter" for a really good description of Bob Lee Swagger's stalk of a monster buck. Good stuff.
You don't ID your rifle, but I'm assuming you went with the AR pattern rifle per your comments. If you have or can get your hands on an AR style rifle, you need to go through all the motions you described to realize how much noise and movement you are making. A hunter is going to want minimize those to the extent possible. With the semi auto, they just aren't as quiet as a bolt action for assembly, chambering, etc. most of which a hunter is going to want to accomplish prior to getting close to the game to avoid spooking them. It can be done less noisily, but not quietly. Bottomline, you need to find a way to have her only action near the game to be taking the safety off.
Thanks! I did go in and switch to the rifle you suggested. You were right it worked better, plus the suppressor works better for a whole host of NIS apocalyptic reasons lol. I also added a little more detail into the next chapter about the fact that she was bloody from butchering the deer and wrapping it in its own hide. My BIL made those suggestions. Thanks for the help!
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